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The soft hum of radio static
I role over, slowly, languidly.
6:30 pierces through the darkness
As I stumble to stop the sound;
I fall back to bed,
Fifteen more minutes of peace.
6:45, lights flash through my door,
I yell reassurance that I’m up.
I feel for my clothes with eyes still shut
And walk out of my sanctuary.
The lights burn my eyes
Like soft white matches held to the skin,
I reach for the switch and bring back the night.
I eat a bite of food in my sleepy daze and shamble to the bathroom;
Comb your hair, brush your teeth, and wash your face,
Like clockwork I obey and finish the task.
Dressed and ready I head out the door,
Bag on back and money in pocket,
Ready to face the world at my age,
Ready for life to begin
But going nowhere as of now.
©2005-2009 ~DeviantWritersUnion
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This poem just really flowed out of me really quickly. I just wrote about what is real, what I go through on an average day; or in this case a morning. Enjoy

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Nice! I especially like the lines 6:30 pierces through the darkness and I reach for the switch and bring back the night. Although I think the lines Comb your hair, brush your teeth, and wash your face, / Like clockwork I obey and finish the task. are not transitioned into well enough. Who is saying this? Is it the internal drum of conscience? Is it your mother? It's just kind of like a break in the poetry where it suddenly skips from 1st person to 2nd. And I think it'd be better if "and finish the task" were taken out, because it is not necessary and merely serves to decrese the ratio of poetic words to nonpoetic ones. But other than that good job, I wish I could have something like this flow out of me "really quickly"!

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